This is my first pass at a presentation introduction. We are working with Stephen Nixon, which has been a fantastic experience. I have been working this past week to refine my approach - which really means overhaul it all together, but it has been fun. Here is the feedback that I received last week and have been improving upon. The things I talked about in the first minute were not necessarily related to the main point of saving. Starting with social is perhaps revealing something too soon and not immediately clear. Don’t make your audience work too hard from the beginning Make a statement about money that is not so loaded. Something that is easier to connect with. Something like: “Money Sucks.” Immediately identifiable because we don’t have enough of it. Then move into the fact that it’s also social. Go slower., Pause more., Too many ums. Credit cards: the obvious option, but not the only option. The important thing about saving is: Build empathy with your audience We are re-presenting tomorrow to Chloe Gottlieb, David Womack and Tamara Giltsoff and I am feeling much better about the direction I am headed.

This is my first pass at a presentation introduction. We are working with Stephen Nixon, which has been a fantastic experience. I have been working this past week to refine my approach - which really means overhaul it all together, but it has been fun. Here is the feedback that I received last week and have been improving upon.

  • The things I talked about in the first minute were not necessarily related to the main point of saving.
  • Starting with social is perhaps revealing something too soon and not immediately clear. Don’t make your audience work too hard from the beginning
  • Make a statement about money that is not so loaded. Something that is easier to connect with. Something like: “Money Sucks.” Immediately identifiable because we don’t have enough of it. Then move into the fact that it’s also social.
  • Go slower., Pause more., Too many ums.
  • Credit cards: the obvious option, but not the only option.
  • The important thing about saving is:
  • Build empathy with your audience

We are re-presenting tomorrow to Chloe Gottlieb, David Womack and Tamara Giltsoff and I am feeling much better about the direction I am headed.